Cold
My hands are numb
especially my thumb,
And my toes are cold
and as I'm told
I could get hypothermia.
But this is fun,
Even without the sun.
And
Look!
We got there.
Finally.
Snowshoes off
I need to cough
Sinking
deeper
deeper
deeper
The hill manages to get steeper
And then we hit
Water
Frozen cold
I scramble out
and I shout
Falling
falling
Slipping
Tumbling
But then I land
and sit
Under a tree,
My head on a shoulder,
Finally.
We scramble on boulders
as we get colder,
straight to the fire
feeling so dire,
I wish I was dryer
Shhowueeee!!!
Still gone are snowshoes
I'm sure I have a bruise,
Running,
Sliping.
Falling.
Back to the bus,
In quite a rush
Finally
Sitting
Smiling
Smiling
My head on a shoulder
Finally
My
fingers
toes
hands
feet
heart
are
Warm
This is so good and descriptive!! You can tell that it is really cold!
ReplyDeleteOh yes, this, ah, perfectly describes our trip. I like how you break up the lines in a way so that the line length undulates nicely. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis is super good!!!! I can totally picture all of this, especially the water ;)
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I liked how you rhymed!
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